Monday, February 12, 2007

Goldilocks and the Three Bears (by Charlie, Age 6, part three of a three-part series)

Author's note: for older kids over the age when Goldilocks runs away from the three bears. In this one they eat her.

Once there was a little girl named Goldilocks.
Her house was horrible!
The roof wasn't on right and it let all the air blow in.
It didn't have anything, just walls and a window.

One day after school Goldilocks went outside to play.

After she got out of school, she saw some construction workers making her house better than before. Thye put furniture in and everything.

She walked and walked in the forest until she came to a cabin. It was so cool. She walked inside.

She found three balls of deer meat and there was cups of deer blood. And a decoration of deer horns. Suddenly the three bears stormed in.

They quickly divided her into six pieces and ate her all up.

"For Christmas, I wished for a bunch more Goldilocks," the bears said.

The End!


Amy Reifenrath said...

In that last line of dialogue, should that read Goldilockses? :) Excellent story. I like the home improvement angle and the deer decor.

amy reifenrath said...

The last line is intriguing. Do you think it should read Goldilockses? I guess it depends on whether they ate her before or after Christmas. Also, I like the home improvement/decor angle. The laborers also open this to a Marxist interpretation.

susansinclair said...

Isn't this the first time they divided her into an even number of pieces? Now, we still don't know how those pieces were distributed amongst the bears, but an interesting authorial choice nonetheless.